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-..In July I’m going to a science youth summer camp. It’s an international camp, but the working language is English. If you like science, which of the subjects are your favourite? What kinds of summer camps are available for the youth in Russia? Which of them would you like to go to, and why? …As for the latest news, I’ve passed my driving test and my elder brother said he’ll let me use his car! Write a letter to Todd. In your letter — Answer his questions — Ask 3 questions about his driving test

Moscow

Russia

30/04/15

Dear Todd,

Thanks for your last letter! I was glad to get it. Sorry, I haven’t written for so long but I was busy with my schoolwork.

Well, you asked me about summer camps. Personally, I’m interested in science. Most of all, I like chemistry as it’s exciting to perform various experiments. Speaking of Russia, there are many summer camps for those who are fond of sport, science, art. As for me, I would go to a sports camp because I prefer active way of spending my time.

Anyway, great news about your driving test! How many questions did you have to answer? Were they difficult? How much time did it take you to prepare for the test?

Sorry, I’ve got to go now. My favourite TV programme is on. Write back soon.

Best wishes,

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Алена, молодец! Хорошее письмо, раскрыты все пункты плана, высокий языковой уровень Так держать!

It’s beneficial in many ways to host international sport events.

Some countries host international sporting events. The question then arises: is it actually beneficial?

To my mind, hosting a sporting event has many advantages. First of all, the authority and popularity of a country increase. Besides, many people from different countries follow the news about preparing for an event. Secondly, a host country does its best to improve a state of old sporting objects as well as to build new ones. Finally, citizens feel proud of their country and try to be a part of an event. Moreover, some people become volunteers.

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My summer holidays (Мои летние каникулы). Тема на английском языке с переводом

... друзьями, играл в компьютерные игры, читал интересные книги. Мне очень понравились мои летние каникулы. Holidays in a summer camp I spent these summer holidays in a summer camp ... play football or badminton in the yard. Every summer I go to the country to visit my grandparents. I stay there for ... каждое лето. Иногда мы ходим на рыбалку либо гуляем по лесу. Мне нравится ходить на реку если не сильно ...

However, there is another opinion. Host countries are considered to spend a lot of money on organizing a sporting event. This cost is rather high and can have a negative influence on a country’s budget.

Nevertheless, I partly disagree with this point of view because the money is never wasted. Amazing opening and closing ceremonies, well-equipped stadiums, new sporting objects are definitely worth spending so much money.

To conclude, it is up to everyone whether to believe that hosting a sporting event is beneficial or not. As for me, I am still in favour of the idea that it is rather beneficial to host sporting events. I believe it has many pros.

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Татьяна ВалерьевнаЩербаковаКомментарий эксперта:

Алена, снова молодец! Хорошо структурированное, логичное сочинение. Ряд замечаний: 1) внимательнее с артиклями — несколько ошибок на одно правило, 2) в первом абзаце, где ставится проблема, должна прозвучать двойственность, чтобы потом рассмотреть обе стороны этой проблемы, т.е. в данном случае было достаточно добавить в вопрос … or not?

Animals in the zoos. For and against.There are a lot of zoos in the world and millions of people visit them every year. But are zoos harmful or helpful to animals which are caged there?I strongly believe that we should not keep animals in zoos because captivity is not natural for them and it is a constant stress to a wild animal. Keeping animals in zoos harms them by denying them freedom of movement and association. What is more, zoos are like prisons for animals as they live in small cages and do not get necessary food. In addition, animals become very aggressive and unpredictable as they get older and often attack zoo keepers and other people.However, most people think that zoos help endangered species survive. But this is not true because most rare animals are extremely difficult to breed in captivity. Besides, in zoos, it is almost impossible to meet the animals’ natural needs. Another argument for keeping animals in zoos is that people learn something new about these animals. Actually, zoos do not teach us much because animals do not act the way they would in the wild. I think we can learn more about animals by watching wildlife programs on TV.In conclusion, I would argue that zoos do not seem to help endangered species and keeping animals behind bars only for the sake of our entertainment is not quite fair. In my opinion, people must create nature reserves, where wild animals will be able to live in their natural environment.

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Татьяна ВалерьевнаЩербаковаКомментарий эксперта:

Ирина, молодец! Очень логичное, полное высказывание на хорошем языковом уровне, раскрыты все пункты плана.Пожелание на будущее. Если еще будете присылать работы, то, пожалуйста, отделяйте абзацы пробелом, чтобы их четко было видно.

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My favourite food ? топик на английском языке, -рассказ о любимой ...

... ешь её. Рассказ о еде на английском с переводом поможет не только запомнить ... Больше всего мне нравится пицца «Маргарита», в которую добавляют помидоры, сыр и колбасу. Корочка — это моя любимая часть ... to me, but to my whole family. Most people in England start their day with a traditional ... with milk. For me it is important that the food was delicious and satisfying, looked nice. Mashed potatoes best ...

«Some people prefer to eat out. However, many people still like to cook meals at home»

Nowadays we have different ways to meals. In the street we can find a lot of restaurants or fast food. But is eating in cafes better than eating at home?

To my mind, people should cook food and eat it at home. Firstly, it is healthy food without nutritionalsupplements. A lot of chefs in cafes or restaurants use cheap products, which don’t have benefits for people’s health. Secondly, eating out can be more expensive than cooking meals at home. If people want to eat good food in good restaurants, they should have money. Thirdly, a lot of people interested in cooking and they can improve their skills in it. It is how a hobby.

But other people think that eating out is better. Firstly, it is a chance to taste the food of perfect chefs. They know a lot of secrets of tasty food. Secondly, to go in restaurant is good method to change familiar surroundings. It can diversify our usual life.

It might be true, but I think that we can’t do this very often. That’s why people should improve their skills and cook diches as good as a professional cook. And when people go in cafes or restaurants very often, they don’t feel that it is something special. It is becomes usual for them. I think that people should eat at home with family and to eat out on weekends. Then restaurants help to diversify usual life.

Nowadays we can go in café at the time that we want. But for me to eat at home will always better.

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Татьяна ВалерьевнаЩербаковаКомментарий эксперта:

Аня, в сочинении много положительных моментов. Во-первых, оно хорошо структурировано и раскрывает все пункты плана. Единственное замечание здесь касается 4 абзаца. Предполагаются контраргументы противоположной точке зрения, ваши рассуждения не являются контраргументами, а в конце вы соглашаетесь, что надо ходить в рестораны и они разнообразят жизнь, т.е. противоречите своей позиции, заявленной во втором абзаце и подтвержденной в последнем. Будьте последовательны в своих рассуждениях.В грамматике много ошибок на сказуемые, особенно с глаголом to be.

You have received a letter from your English-speaking pen-friend Jane who writes:… Yesterday my Mum asked me to help her about the house. We were very busy with cleaning up after the birthday party the whole morning. I got quite tired and even missed my fitness class. What are your family duties, if any? Is there anything you especially like or dislike about house work? Do you find helping your parents necessary, why or why not?Oh, I have some great news! I got a lovely kitten for my birthday… Write a letter to Jane.In your letter- answer her questions- ask 3 questions about her kitten

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Топик a letter to a friend | письмо другу

... Good luck — удачи . Пример 1. Письмо другу на английском языке с переводом о планах на будущее Первый пример письма другу на английском языке будет о планах на ... письмо. Ко мне пришла моя подруга Ольга. Отвечай быстрее. С любовью, Маша Dear Tina, Thanks for your letter. ... at home with ... тему. Например, расскажите о своих планах на каникулы или о своём новом домашнем питомце. Вы можете написать письмо ...

Moscow

Russia

24/04/15

Dear Jane,

Thanks for your last letter! I was happy to get it. Sorry, I haven’t written for so long but I was busy with my schoolwork.

Well, you asked me about my household chores. Personally, I wash up, clean up, and vacuum. Mainly, I enjoy doing this because it helps me to relax and makes me forget my problems for a while. However, vacuuming is pretty annoying as it makes lots of noise. Besides, helping parents about the house is important because I can gain some useful skills that are necessary for the future life.

Anyway, congratulations on your kitten! What is its name? What breed is it? Are you aware of how to take care of it?

Sorry, I’ve got to go now. My favourite TV series is on. Keep in touch.

Best wishes,

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Алена, отличный результат! Так держать!Единственное замечание по поводу третьего вопроса: Are you aware of how to take care of it? — это вопрос не про котенка, а про саму Джейн. Он, конечно, не повлиял на результат, но на будущее возьми на заметку.

-..We’ve moved to Chicago. I love it here! Where would you like to live, if you could choose? Why do you think so many people move to big cities? Is it easy for young people in Russia to change where they live, why or why not?By the way, my brother Mike got a new job!..62 K-Marx Street

Kirov

Russia

22/04/2015

Dear Judy,

Thanks for your letter. Sorry, I haven’t been in touch for so long. It was interesting to read all your news.

In your letter you asked me about cities. Firstly, I like the megalopolises that’s why I would like to live in Moscow or St. Petersburg. Secondly, I know that many people prefer the big cities as there are the great opportunities to get a good education and well-paid job. But it’s not easy for young people to move tomegalopolises as their parents often haven’t enough money in order to pay for all teen’s needs.

It’s great to hear that Mike found a job. What job does he get? What does he make do? Does he like it?

Sorry, I must finish my letter as I’m pressed in time.

Write back soon!

Best wishes,

Liza.

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Dear Elizabeth, в целом письмо производит благоприятное впечатление, внимательнее с артиклями. Вопрос Does he like it? не совсем по теме, он не о работе, а об отношении Майка к работе. постарайтесь избегать таких общих вопросов, задавайте что-то более конкретное, например: он работает один или в коллективе, работа далеко от дома и т.д.

The circus is the best entertainment for children?

Nowadays there are a lot of kinds of entertainment for both children and adults. For example, you can go to the theater and watch an interesting performance, go to the cinema or go to the shopping centre. But what is useful for your child? It’s very important question for all parents. Some people think that circus is the best leisure time for children while others believe that there are many different ways of spending children’s free time.

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Тексты на английском языке о птицах

... entertainment like Parrot, dove etc. Сочинение про птиц на английском языке с переводом Птицы — одни из самых удивительных животных на Земле. Птицы имеют крылья и перья. У птиц есть клювы и когти. Птицы живут в гнездах. Птицы ... in cities and make lots of dirt. People have always hunted birds for food. ... they are equally important for nature and people. Существуют различные виды животных, все они очень ...

In my opinion, circus is a good place for people of all ages. Firstly, there are a lot of animals. I think that a child should broaden his mind and improve his knowledge about wild nature. Moreover, the little boys and girls get a great pleasure watching a performance. They can meet the happy clowns. Such peoplealways have a red nose and colorful hair. Children also communicate with people and find new friends.

However, a lot of people think that there are many different kinds of entertainment. They believe that the circus is the prison for animals. But I cannot agree with statement as I’m sure that the professionals take care of wild animals, feed and love them.

In conclusion, I must say that this problem has own pros and cons. Each parent should choose the useful and funny entertainment for his child. Anyway, the circus helps get some information about wild nature and broaden child’s mind.

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Татьяна ВалерьевнаЩербаковаКомментарий эксперта:

Первый абзац, постановка проблемы, оч.растянут, надо лаконичнее, и тогда можно подробнее раскрывать 2 или 3 пункт.В заключительном абзаце должна быть эксплицитно выражена своя точка зрения, т.е. надо повторить свое мнение. В данном случае: «Я уверена, что цирк — хорошее развлечение для детей» или что-то в этом роде.Опять артикли! Все грамматические ошибки из этого раздела, значит надо повторить его.В целом, сочинение вполне достойное.Успехов!